2013年11月10日 星期日



Topic: My one-of-a-kind grandfather

Main Body:
    Main idea: 
My grandfather is special because he showed to me how perseverance, patience and 
                       love can make a difference in one's life.
        
        (1)Topic sentence 1: My grandpa had been through a really though time during his
                                           teenage years.

             Supporting examples:
               1) He was a hard-working student in his hometown, in order to have a better studying
                   opportunty, he moved to Jinan and live with his grandpa.
               2) His grandpa passed away but he had no money to burry him. He almost had to "sell
                   himself" to be a slave. Luckily, he had gotten enough money at last.
               3) Few years later, the Chinese Civil War broke down, and he was fored to become a
                   rufugee.
               4) During this trip, many bad things happened (I didn't put them in the right order because
                    I have to comfirm the time again ):
                    (1) He was sent into the jail because the Taiwanese government thought he was a spy
                          that Communist Party of China sent to show how poor you would be if you still
                          want to stay with the Koumintang.
                    (2) After he had worked for a while, he finally saved enough money to buy a new pair
                         of shoes, but after he washed them and put them under the sun to dry it, someone
                         stole them right away. He had no choice but wear the pair of old shoes which a
                         kind woman gave him.
                    (3) His girlfriend who kept all of his money ran away with another guy. Luckily his
                          teacher shared his room with my grandpa so that my grandpa wouldn't have to
                          live on the street.    
            
     
        (2)Topic sentence 2: No one compares to my grandpa when it comes to perseverance.
             Supporting sentences/ examples:
               1) His studying: He had loved studying since he was young. He continued studying even
                   when he was a refugee. He made to the NTU by himself.
               2) Among all of the subjects, his favorite was math. But because his major in university
                   was history, he then have to learn it by himself. After he graduated from university,
                   instead of being a history teacher, he became a math teacher instead. Few years later,
                   he  began to teach in Jianzhong.

    

1 則留言:

  1. We don't need to dedicate the first paragraph to telling the stories. We can tell the stories in every paragraph.

    What about the topic sentences for paragraph 3 and paragraph 4?

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